Fanfic Plot(review needed)

Since you guys tend to obsess over anime alot, I decided that my best bet for a review for a story plot would be here

http://pastebin.com/CENRwP0H

basically, whoever has the time, can read through this, and tell me how the plot is, whether its good, decent, meh, or vomit worthy, and why

guess J.J. Bastard would be best for this, but idk if he's here

have fun

edit: does the name Yukira sound gay?

aaaaaand thank you for not caring!

you're welcome

Write an actual summary for us to get the gist of the story rather than the plot outline for each chapter/duel. It's harder to care about the former when we don't get what it's about until we read it. Like fuck your chapter outline are filled with details that usually go into the actual writing itself, and there's 24 fucking chapters, it's a pain to read keeping in mind it's nothing but an outline.

If you're just using a Japanese name cuz it sounds cool and Japanese, it sounds gay. Stick to the common names you see a lot. Yuki, not Yukira. Maybe even Yuuki instead if you want bravery rather than snow.